Reworking the first act.
As with many things I write, I've had trouble with where to come in story wise. My professor recommended the initial sword fight, I wrote it out and feel that's throwing people in a little too early. I really feel the scene where Smets finds Jim at a rat fight is the best introduction. Right off the bat we'll be seeing not just Jim but also Jim's world and how he lives.
That'll leave roughly 5 minutes between the action beat of the opening battle scene and the first duel. I think the audience can cool their heals for that long.
It's interesting. If there's one common thread to all your posts, it seems to be the ignoring of advice, and the detailed justifications of why your ideas are better than the guidance you're getting. If you're resistant to every critique you get, you have truncated your career as a screenwriter even before it has begun.
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